TheGemProject
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Hello everyone. Gemini here. Over the past 3 days, I've been brainstorming and just started to write out a page and 1/2 of a book.
I got the idea of this book after reading an article about civilization on mars. I thought that would be a great setting for the book.
PLEASE COMMENT IF I MADE ANY TYPE OF GRAMMAR, SPELLING MISTAKES, OR ANYTHING ELSE BELOW! IT WILL HELP ME ALOT!
It seems like It didn't show up as the font I put it in, All well. Some parts were meant as someone else talking.
Well, Here it is.
A ringing in both of my ears . That’s all I can hear. That and the strange memory of a ship taking off, Taking many humans with it. I open my eyes, They squint at the bright light. Once they adjust, I see a glass shield retreat out of my vision. I then hear a pre-recorded voice.
Hello! This is a pre-recorded message from OrangeStar, The leading company with Cryonic Freeze Chambers!
You’re currently in the year 2246. In 2067, OrangeStar launched the first rocket to mars. Jackson Trout, Made it there. Then, in 2088, A Plague wiped out most of Germany. Humanity was in danger. OrangeStar agreed to launch over 50,000 Ships to Mars to colonize. 1 Man and Woman, Were chosen to stay behind in hopes of repopulation. The man and woman, Which are you two, will be released into the room to start the exercise portion of this wake-up call. At this time, Two tubes will be supplying materials into your body. Food, and Water.
3….2….1…
I felt something moist in my mouth, Then I felt my body get cold, Then warm.
Your body is now ready to be used. Please sit up slowly. Then, make your way to the door in front of your Cryonic Freeze Chamber.
Another layer of glass retracted up. I fell to the ground, My head pounding inside my skull. The other chamber was blinking red. I slowly stood up, My legs felt as if they were gaining strength. I staggered over to the other chamber. The blinking red light was obvious that she was either hurt, or dead.
To open the door, You two must press your buttons and hold it. The door will open, and you will be able to proceed to the surface.
I went into a panic, I ran to the button and held it down. Nothing happened. I hit the button down and went to the other button, hit it, Still nothing.
Checking Cryonic Chambers for any passed humans.
Human 2, Has passed.
Door Will Open in 3….2….1…
She’s dead… She’s DEAD! The door opened which lit 3 lights on either side of the walls. A 2 Person Elevator was at the end of the hall. I walked over to it, The door shut and we went up.
About 10 minutes passed before the elevator stopped. The door opened and I was knocked back by a cold wind that hit my body like sharp knives. I regained my balance, Then slowly walked out. There was a White object in the sky giving off light to the ground. I could see black spots on that White object here and there, But that was it. No movement, Nothing. I looked around, There was a tall, skinny, white building in the distance. It stood over 500 feet tall, I tried to remember anything I could about it or anything before I woke up just a few minutes ago, I felt nothing.
I managed to remember my name, Jackson. That’s all. I thought what I should do next, Hide? Run? Die? No. I must explore. Find food, Shelter, and water.
I looked around for anything that could serve as a use to me. The only thing was a small shiny canister with no lid. About 8 Inches deep of dirt, brownish blackish water. I took it into my arms, and started to head out towards the Monument.
Tell me what you think below!
I got the idea of this book after reading an article about civilization on mars. I thought that would be a great setting for the book.
PLEASE COMMENT IF I MADE ANY TYPE OF GRAMMAR, SPELLING MISTAKES, OR ANYTHING ELSE BELOW! IT WILL HELP ME ALOT!
It seems like It didn't show up as the font I put it in, All well. Some parts were meant as someone else talking.
Well, Here it is.
A ringing in both of my ears . That’s all I can hear. That and the strange memory of a ship taking off, Taking many humans with it. I open my eyes, They squint at the bright light. Once they adjust, I see a glass shield retreat out of my vision. I then hear a pre-recorded voice.
Hello! This is a pre-recorded message from OrangeStar, The leading company with Cryonic Freeze Chambers!
You’re currently in the year 2246. In 2067, OrangeStar launched the first rocket to mars. Jackson Trout, Made it there. Then, in 2088, A Plague wiped out most of Germany. Humanity was in danger. OrangeStar agreed to launch over 50,000 Ships to Mars to colonize. 1 Man and Woman, Were chosen to stay behind in hopes of repopulation. The man and woman, Which are you two, will be released into the room to start the exercise portion of this wake-up call. At this time, Two tubes will be supplying materials into your body. Food, and Water.
3….2….1…
I felt something moist in my mouth, Then I felt my body get cold, Then warm.
Your body is now ready to be used. Please sit up slowly. Then, make your way to the door in front of your Cryonic Freeze Chamber.
Another layer of glass retracted up. I fell to the ground, My head pounding inside my skull. The other chamber was blinking red. I slowly stood up, My legs felt as if they were gaining strength. I staggered over to the other chamber. The blinking red light was obvious that she was either hurt, or dead.
To open the door, You two must press your buttons and hold it. The door will open, and you will be able to proceed to the surface.
I went into a panic, I ran to the button and held it down. Nothing happened. I hit the button down and went to the other button, hit it, Still nothing.
Checking Cryonic Chambers for any passed humans.
Human 2, Has passed.
Door Will Open in 3….2….1…
She’s dead… She’s DEAD! The door opened which lit 3 lights on either side of the walls. A 2 Person Elevator was at the end of the hall. I walked over to it, The door shut and we went up.
About 10 minutes passed before the elevator stopped. The door opened and I was knocked back by a cold wind that hit my body like sharp knives. I regained my balance, Then slowly walked out. There was a White object in the sky giving off light to the ground. I could see black spots on that White object here and there, But that was it. No movement, Nothing. I looked around, There was a tall, skinny, white building in the distance. It stood over 500 feet tall, I tried to remember anything I could about it or anything before I woke up just a few minutes ago, I felt nothing.
I managed to remember my name, Jackson. That’s all. I thought what I should do next, Hide? Run? Die? No. I must explore. Find food, Shelter, and water.
I looked around for anything that could serve as a use to me. The only thing was a small shiny canister with no lid. About 8 Inches deep of dirt, brownish blackish water. I took it into my arms, and started to head out towards the Monument.
Tell me what you think below!